If you didn't see it on my Facebook tagline, a few days ago I completed a small piece of fan fiction.
Click here to read it.
This is what you might call a try piece; if you aren't familiar with the characters, the backstory, the events that led up to this point, then these two pages of narrative are not going to mean a whole lot to you. That's not really the point of the material, though. It's just a small sample and not anything I'd actually want to publish. It was, to put it bluntly, done for kicks. I was bored. I posted it because what I want to find out is how my writing stacks up to others, to professionals in the field.
So, if you have a few minutes today to read through and write a critique coming from *that* viewpoint, please do so. It would be of great benefit to me as I begin to churn a few ideas.
Thanks in advance.
1 comment:
I still am amused you made a point to ensure Arland got some in the first chapter. And, from your description, with implied tiefling wildness. :P
Still, always very "human" dialog and behavior. You have a mind for capturing the mannerisms and flux of humanity, even when your subject isn't strictly part of the species.
I wouldn't call it novel quality, simply because you said it isn't. No fan fiction I've ever read is of novel quality. You don't have a professional editor poring over each line, so that's to be expected. Also, all fanfic sucks in some way. It's just the law.
Still, for a rough bit of tomfoolery, it puts everything else out there to shame. You have the gift for writing, no doubt about that.
I know my opinion isn't probably the one you're looking for, and to anyone else reading this, I assure you I am showing him no bias. I am not easy on anyone's work. *grin* If anything, I'm harder on Jason's work, because I know he's capable of more.
So, that being said, I have one enormous problem with it: it's a rather weak start. Arland not picking a lock and then having his girlfriend drag him to bed? Not really the stuff epics are made of. It's as bad as a cheesy annual fair. ;) Maybe worse.
If the story ended here, I wouldn't feel disappointed. There's no urgency, no hook, no tension, no drama, no suspense.
In contrast to your original manuscript that has all the gory excitement of a good horror movie. I really want to find out what those freakin' monsters are! In fact, I kind of hate that you dropped it. I really want to know what the deal is and if the cat will someone come into it later.
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